Exhibition

The illustrations in this are fantastic. Your narration is also very well done. I like the premise of this, I just feel I'm missing something. Does Adam know what his past mistakes are when he is awake? Why does he keep seeing his past life, and what helps him realize he needs to move past it? Overall, nicely done!

The beginning of your story is really great. I was interested right from the get go, but I felt like the story lost some of its momentum once he arrived at the cafe. There are a few things I don't quite understand. When he is interacting with the waitress, is this in the past or present? If it is the past and how did he interact with the bow and the woman, as it seems like in the rest he is merely an observer? You have a great art style and your frames are really clear and well composed. I think this feels like the beginning of a story and we are waiting to see what he does. Does he interfere with a past life? Does he meet her in the present? Does he fix his mistakes (whether in the present or past)? This story has so much potential and I hope you continue with it. Also... give it a name! :)

I was intrigued by your story from the start. I am interested in your character and their life. The drawings are very clear and support the storytelling very well. I was confused by two things. 1) What makes him chuckle?2) why is the waitress shocked when he returns the bow? I want to know more about his past life and the mistakes he thought he had made and feel like it would be good to have more experiences help him come to the conclusion that he wants to focus more on being in his present life. The line work in your drawings is very clear and really helps direct our eye well.